Alright -- Criticize me!

[Mae]

Tell me the good, the bad, and the ugly!

(The size of the font is bigger when it's printed too)

BTW: On the front page there are dots and then in parenthesis (sp?) is a description of which picture it is. I had to take out the pictures to post here, because otherwise the document was too big to upload. The only description that will be there on the final draft will say..

(picture)
Rear Facing at X years & X months.

Let me know if you'd like one!
Please note that the following attachments are NOT the final draft! Ask me, and I'll send you the original, workable, printable file!

 

[skiersnowboarder3]

Good job! I like that the info is easy to understand and not too technical. Two things I noticed: unsurvivable must not be a word because it's showing up with a red line under it. Also, I wouldn't tab the paragraphs over quite so far. They look like you're wasting half of the line.

 

[skiersnowboarder3]

Oh and I'd like a copy when you're finished.

 

[Mae]

Yeah, I saw that after I posted. Then got distracted and forgot to fix it lol. And I guess I'll have to manually do the tabs.

I'll send you a copy in a day or two, so that I can get some feedback on it all..ect. You know?

 

[An Aurora]

It's a bit too wordy for me. The paragraph about RF if really confusing. I'd say "although 1 yr/20 pounds is widely known, this "rule" is outdated. It's now recommended by the AAP, SafeKids Worldwide & all car seat manufacturers that children rear-face as long as possible, to the limit of their seat (which is 30, 33, or 35 pounds depending on your seat)..."

 

[skiersnowboarder3]

[FONT='Century Gothic','sans-serif']“WRONG! This has not been proven. Even if it had, would you rather your child have a broken leg, or a broken neck, risking paralysis? There is not a single documented case of children's legs, hips, etc. breaking in a crash due to rear-facing. There are plenty of cases of head and neck injury in forward facing children that could have been prevented if the child had remained rear facing. Second, children are more flexible than adults, so unless they are complaining, they are comfortable. In everyday life, toddlers CHOSE to sit with their legs folded up - that IS comfort to them. ”[/FONT]

chose should be choose

 

[HEVY]

I didn't see the pics.

 

[skiersnowboarder3]

BTW: On the front page there are dots and then in parenthesis (sp?) is a description of which picture it is. I had to take out the pictures to post here, because otherwise the document was too big to upload. The only description that will be there on the final draft will say..

(picture)
Rear Facing at X years & X months.

Let me know if you'd like one!

She had to take the pics out.

 

[firemomof3]

I think its great but I agree that it is too wordy. We want people to want to read this and if there are too many words and not enough pictures then they might just blow it off. But I'm lovin that your doing this!! Now, all we need is a magnet for our cars that promote extended rf!!

 

[tjham]

I think it's great, but...(I know, there's always a but... )

Although the pictures of older ERF kids make *us* (as carseat freaks) all warm and fuzzy, they tend to freak out (in a bad way) people who just don't understand. Since I think this brochure is for newbies who don't know much about ERF, I would rather see pictures with 2 yr olds RF, so that people don't look at a picture of a 4 yr old RF, go "Whoa!" and dismiss the whole concept.
I have convinced several people to go to 24 months by adding a little bit of time each time they wanted to FF "Just another month or so, come on, you can do it!"
If, at the beginning, they had thought I wanted them to RF to 4 yrs old, that would have been the end of the discussion. At 12 months, the kids would have been FF faster than you can shake a stick!

I hope that doesn't offend anyone, but I think it's realistic.

 

[Mae]

It's a bit too wordy for me. The paragraph about RF if really confusing. I'd say "although 1 yr/20 pounds is widely known, this "rule" is outdated. It's now recommended by the AAP, SafeKids Worldwide & all car seat manufacturers that children rear-face as long as possible, to the limit of their seat (which is 30, 33, or 35 pounds depending on your seat)..."

chose should be choose

Fixed and fixed.

Is the re-wording better?

BTW: All edits I do will be in the original post...

 

[Mae]

If, at the beginning, they had thought I wanted them to RF to 4 yrs old, that would have been the end of the discussion. At 12 months, the kids would have been FF faster than you can shake a stick!

I hope that doesn't offend anyone, but I think it's realistic.

I thought about that, but in the pictures I used, they don't look that old. Although it does say the age right underneath...Should I use younger kids?

 

[BookMama]

I thought about that, but in the pictures I used, they don't look that old. Although it does say the age right underneath...Should I use younger kids?

I would stick with younger kids, not more than two years old, and in fact I did just that in a RF article I wrote last week.

 

[Mae]

Ok, I'm going to use these two...

Are those better?

Any other changes you'd like to see? Suggestions?

 

[myliljunebugs]

That looks amazing! Great job! The only thing I would change (sorry!!) is that the pictures only have Britax. I am a huge Britax fan, but you don't want it to look like ONLY Britax has RF'ing. If you don't want to use the one in the Cosco Scenera, I'm willing to let you use this one (sorry I missed the other post earlier)

I know a lot of people get brand scared (or whatever you want to call it) when they see Britax seats. Saying they can't/won't EH because they won't spend $300 on a seat, etc. If you would post a final file when you are done, I would LOVE permission to print it to hand out at my work!! (I work at a daycare). Thanks!

 

[myliljunebugs]

Oh, she was 2yrs 8months.

 

[Mae]

That looks amazing! Great job! The only thing I would change (sorry!!) is that the pictures only have Britax. I am a huge Britax fan, but you don't want it to look like ONLY Britax has RF'ing. I know a lot of people get brand scared (or whatever you want to call it) when they see Britax seats. Saying they can't/won't EH because they won't spend $300 on a seat, etc.

I see what you're saying. Here's what I think. Since the pictures wont be as detailed when they are printed, you probably won't be able to see the "britax" logo in the back. Since most of the parents probably havent seen/heard of britax, they probably won't think much of it. YK? I know when I first when car seat shopping, the only place I saw britax was online.

 

[Laurette]

Maybe you could include a section for reccomended seats that allow for Rfing longer. Are you allowed to mention brands?

 

[Mae]

Maybe you could include a section for reccomended seats that allow for Rfing longer. Are you allowed to mention brands?

Well, I dont know if I would have any room to add rec'd seats lol. I'm not sure if I can mention brands, either. I know last time I couldn't use the manufacturer's pictures of the seats...

 

[Mae]

Ok, the final draft is done!

As I have said in a previous post...

BTW: On the front page there are dots and then in parenthesis (sp?) is a description of which picture it is. I had to take out the pictures to post here, because otherwise the document was too big to upload. The only description that will be there on the final draft will say..

(picture)
Rear Facing at X years & X months.

With that said, I still cannot upload the file directly onto the website, so whoever wants want can either comment here, or said me an email! Either way, make sure you give me the email address that you would like it to be sent to (if you have commented/email me already, don't worry about emailing me again. I will go ahead and start sending out copies now).